Comment on Meagan's (Ari Garvett)

    I am quite fond of the compare and contrast method that you have stylized in your paper. It is in a sense, a sort of tease to your readers. One minute your present the utopian idea of a wonderful free spirited place, and the next you slice that with the knife with your introduction of the institutions. This affect I believe is a crucial element to your paper as it illustrates the cruelties that the three pillars are made of. In light of lasts week's post as well I believe your paper is flowing quite nicely and everything is connected which I believe is a hard task as your topic is quite expansive. You manage to hone in this idea while keeping your readers intrigued. So far, so good!